ext_21392 ([identity profile] kallistei.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] dbsk_flashfic 2008-04-11 03:59 pm (UTC)

Sigh, Yunho. Sigh! I liked this, and it rang true to a lot of how I see Yunho.

Just a couple of concrit things, though. 'Putting up appearances' is a bit of a mixed metaphor, and I think your last sentence should read, '...Yunho wasn't supposed to mind...'.
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